In your first paragraph I would add, why would like to work there more specifically. Maybe add something about why what they do intrigues you. Also in your third paragraph I would take out the dates that you worked there since its in your resume. I think you logo looks rad too, I would rounded the edges of the "C" because it creates a nice contrast between the box inside your M. I would maybe try taking out the 90 degree angle lines, its feels a bit architectural me. I didn't see any typos but I might try making your last paragraph a bit less generic, it could use some more voice or life added.